haux.studio

Section 07

Voice and tone

Writing gets decided before the sentence, not during it. Five traits, five principles, a seven point check before anything ships, and a list of words that never do.

07 · Voice and tone

Traits are only useful with their failure mode attached. Each one below carries what it looks like in practice and what it becomes when nobody is watching.

Five traits, and what each one turns into when it slips

Voice is constant. Tone is what moves.

The five traits hold in every channel, including the ones where nobody is enjoying themselves. What changes by channel is the mix, and the mix is set out further down this page.

Listing a trait without its failure mode is what makes a voice page decorative. Each trait below is written so a reviewer can point at a sentence and say which side of the line it fell on.

Trait · Bold

Takes a position in the first line and holds it.

In practice

Name the recommendation and the price without a run up. State what the work will do, and state what it will not.

Bold is a structural choice, not a volume setting. It shows up in where the argument sits, which is always the first line.

Failure mode

Volume standing in for a view. Bold with nothing to recommend is a bigger font and a smaller idea.

The traits are constant. The proportions change by channel, and the channel settings are further down this page.

Tone principles

Principles that cannot be applied to a specific sentence do not survive a deadline. Each one below carries the reasoning, two worked rewrites and the short rules that follow from it.

Five principles, each with a rewrite beside it

01 · Open with a recommendation, not a menu

A menu of options hands the decision back to the client, which is the one thing they were trying to avoid buying.

01 · Overview

Three viable directions in a document read as three unfinished ones. Pick the one you would ship and name it in the first line.

Keep the alternatives. They belong under the recommendation as the reasoning that produced it, not beside it as equal candidates.

This holds in an email, a proposal and a review. The reader should know what you think before they know what you considered.

02 · Frame in outcomes, not deliverables

A list of files tells a client what they are buying and not what changes once it lands.

02 · Overview

Deliverables describe effort. Outcomes describe what is different afterwards, which is the only part being paid for.

Name the outcome first and let the file list sit underneath it as the method. The method is reassuring; it is not the argument.

Retention, conversion, clarity and trust cover most of what the work moves. A paragraph that ties to none of them is describing process.

03 · State problems directly

A softened problem gets discussed twice, once when you hint at it and again when it lands anyway.

03 · Overview

A problem stated plainly is easier to fix than one wrapped in qualifiers. Say what is wrong, say what it costs, say what you propose.

None of that is rude when the next sentence is a fix. Hedging reads as either uncertainty or bad news being managed, and both cost trust.

One qualifier per sentence is the ceiling. Two means the sentence is apologising for itself.

04 · Write for a non-specialist

The person who signs the invoice is rarely the person who knows what a design token is.

04 · Overview

Jargon narrows the audience to people who already agree with you. Write so the finance lead and the engineer take the same meaning from the same sentence.

Terms of art are fine once the line that introduces them explains them. Used without that line, they are a way of sounding certain without being clear.

Read it aloud before sending. If you would not say it in the room, it does not go in the document.

05 · Let the work carry the argument

Adjectives are what a page reaches for when there is no artefact to put in their place.

05 · Overview

Show the screen, the before, the number. Description fills the space where evidence should be, and readers can tell the difference.

Cut the adjective and put the artefact where it was standing. The sentence gets shorter and the claim gets stronger.

This is the cheapest edit available on any page: delete the line praising the work, and the work is still there.

Before it ships

Run these before anything leaves the studio. They take under a minute and they catch most of what a review would have caught.

Seven checks, in order

The pre-ship check

1. It opens on a problem or a recommendation, not on Haux.

2. Every paragraph is three sentences or fewer.

3. The central idea is the shortest sentence in the piece.

4. It describes impact, not deliverables.

5. It closes on a result or a direction.

6. No word from the avoid list survived.

7. Read aloud, it sounds like a person.

Check three is the one that gets skipped. If the central idea is currently the longest sentence, the piece is not finished.

Words and mechanics

Word choice is the fastest thing to check and the slowest to fix once it is in circulation. These four lists settle it.

The words, the punctuation and the way the brand is named

Say

Short, concrete, mostly Anglo-Saxon. Reach here first.

fix, build, ship, earn, clarity, sharp, real, outcome, craft, momentum, direct, partner, works, result, honest, simple, precise, deliberate, considered, distinct, rigorous.

These are not required words and a document stuffed with them reads as a document stuffed with them. They are the register: if a sentence sounds wrong, the nearest word from this list is usually the repair.

Tone by context

Tone is the setting that moves. Each channel below carries its own mix, and one of them turns the playfulness off entirely.

Five channels, five registers

Channel · Proposal

Direct and specific. Recommend, price, stop.

Lead with the recommendation, then the outcome it buys, then the price. Everything after that is method, and method goes last.

Bold and confident run high here. Playful runs low, because a document with a number in it is being read carefully.

Opening line to aim at: "Start with onboarding. It is where most sign ups are lost, and fixing it first pays for the rest."

Voice does not change across these five. Only the mix does, and only playfulness ever reaches zero.

Difficult conversations

Hard messages get written badly because they get written fast. These four are the ones that recur, so the framing is agreed in advance.

Four scripts, so nobody improvises under pressure

Each script below is a starting point, not a template to paste. Change the specifics and keep the order, because the order is what makes the message land.

All four follow the same shape: state it, cost it, offer the next move.

Scope creep

Approved framing: "That is new work, and I would rather be straight about it than absorb it quietly. It adds about a week. Do you want it in this phase or the next one?"

Naming it the first time is what stops the fourth time. Absorbed scope is invisible to the client and expensive to the studio.

A missed date

Approved framing: "We will miss Friday. The build now lands Wednesday the 12th, and nothing after it moves. Here is what caused it and what we changed so it does not repeat."

Send it the day you know, not the day it slips. The new date is only credible if it arrives before the old one fails.

A rejected direction

Approved framing: "Understood, we will not take that one forward. Before we redraw, tell me which part failed: the idea or the execution. That answer saves us a round."

The question is the whole message. Without it the next round is a guess, and the second rejection is much more expensive than the first.

A price increase

Approved framing: "Rates rise 12% from January, and your current rate holds until then. The work does not change. If that lands badly, say so now and we will look at scope together."

Give notice, hold the old rate through it, and offer scope as the lever. A rate conversation that offers no lever becomes a renewal conversation.

House terms

A house glossary is the cheapest thing on this page and the one that gets quoted in reviews. There is no approved list yet, so what follows is a proposal.

Proposed: three words the studio should stop improvising

Proposed, not decided. These three terms are the ones currently written four different ways across proposals, invoices and the site.

Sign them off or replace them. Leaving them open is the one option that keeps costing something.

  1. The people who pay for the work.

    Do

    Client. Used in every document, including internal ones, so the same word survives into the invoice.

    Don't

    Partner, account, stakeholder, or user when the person meant is the buyer.

  2. The commercial relationship, and the work inside it.

    Do

    Engagement for the relationship, project for a single piece of work inside it. Two words, two meanings.

    Don't

    Using engagement and project interchangeably, which makes every scope conversation start with a definition.

  3. The people doing the work.

    Do

    The studio, externally. The team, internally. Both are fine and neither is a description of headcount.

    Don't

    The agency, the squad, or the resource. The first is inaccurate and the third is insulting.

Three terms is deliberately small. A glossary that reaches thirty entries stops being consulted and becomes a document about itself.

Open

Gaps stated plainly are cheaper than rules invented to fill them. Five things on this page are still open.

What is not decided yet

The house glossary is proposed and unapproved. Until it is signed off, the terms above are a recommendation and not a rule.

There is no approved boilerplate paragraph, so every proposal writes its own description of the studio. That is the single most repeated writing task here and the easiest to settle.

Product and venture naming is governed by brand architecture, which is still draft. Nothing on this page should be read as settling how a product is named.

The register for the studio’s own website is undecided. First person is set for client writing and third person for press, and the site sits between the two.

British spelling is set, and there is no ruling on what happens when a client’s own style guide requires US spelling in shared documents.